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Death Upon a Morning Kiss by ~darkchill:icondarkchill:





Death upon a morning kiss
Dreams of life I will not miss
Razors edges are all that I wish
Pressed against my bleeding wrist
Crimson red, flowing blood
Stained by tears upon my rug
I hold these blades with desire
Hopping my life will soon expire
I see my veins pumping away
Franticly trying to make me stay
No! You can’t! I want to leave!
I won’t let you send that blood I need
I see you trying to hold on
But I must go! It’s all I know!
Depression, sadness, anger, humiliation
I see them as blades and an open invitation
To escape this tragic life I lived
To be released from feelings I have felt since a kid
Love, friends, and a family
Only things I could pray for from a god that’s so abandoning
So the prayers stop, the tears became anew
A Faith was lost and hopes fell threw
A demolished child of ill favor
A lone spirit set free looking down on his now dead savor
©2003-2009 ~darkchill
:icondarkchill:

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oooo just your normal suicide reflection poem :/

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:icongojina:
That was great I loved it
:icondragoncharmer02:
The rhythm of your poetic phrases flow very well, which adds to the overall tone of the poem. It allows it to be read fluidly (ironic since there is so much talk of blood) and it portrays the desparateness that is felt by the speaker. Nice work.

--
Never let today's disappointments overshadow tomorrow's dreams.

~*dragoncharmer02*~ :writersblock:
:icondizzy07:
This is a great poem! sounds like alot of the stuff I write about...
:icondarkchill:
thank you very much
:iconrapturednirvana:
Very good! I especially like: I see my veins pumping away
Franticly trying to make me stay
Beautiful line. One thing I might change is: Depression, sadness, anger, and change them into a little more powerful, spicier adjectives, but it's no biggie. I also like the last line. Very powerful! Overall, great job! :shakefist: Bravo!!!

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:nirvana: I didn't screw it up, did I? - Kurt Cobain :nirvana:
:icondarkchill:
Thanks, means alot :)
:icondarkchill:
aww thanks for comment and favorites :) your to kind
:iconshiwave:
gr8 poem..i love your poems...they are from the deep heart

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